Dialogue feels icky. Some scenes felt rushed... Why are their names so generic. Steve and Mark??? Smith Miller and John Potato.


Why is he working out so much??? You could've used that time for more staring.

Cowboy hats. Okay. We're good. It's okay now.
I can't breathe. Trope: huddle for warmth turned sexual. 1 sip for a part.

Excuse me... Spooky Steve. Spooky man.


Wait. A minute. Cheating? Really???? Man. Darn it.


>Mark: What's the difference to you, Miller?
Steve: Gee, I don't know. Maybe because we screwed around in the desert. (pauses, searching Steve's eyes) (softly) And I can't stop thinking about it.

Okay. Man. That was pretty good acting.

But I'm still upset that he's cheating.

Oh... Mark is spooky too.

Oh. Um. Okay. If I have to see another part, I will scream.

Guys... Bisexuality exists!

Darn it. Why must it be a cheating one?

2 drinks for butt and the front.

>Do you want chicken or not?"
"I think he just wants a hotdog."

That's so cheesy.

Roommate? Oh no. Poor baby. (They should have addressed that more.)


Ew stinky man.

This is just rushed. I think I will stick to slow build. 3 drinks for nudity.